Friday, October 24, 2008

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Part

Breaking apart inside
numb
slowly dying

Breaking apart inside
still
falling further

Breakin apart inside
dead
eyes wide open

Can u hear it
breaking
can u feel me
dying

Do u even care at all

wRote this poem awhile back...do tell me what u think of it..thkx to every-one for their lovely comments n wishes on the previous post..well..njoy the weekend..

9 comments:

autumn said...

i agree with you about using simple words. =]

love this one. though kind of sad. but love it. it's like a lyric of a song. ^^

autumn said...

by the way, you know what, i have a username before in a forum, "LostMySoul". i just thought we got something in common. =]

mariposa said...

That's so sad :( But I love the pictures! At first I liked the one of the girl the best, but now I think I like the eye one better.

Mila said...

Beautiful poem!

Thanks a lot for your comment on my blog.

Love,
Mila.

autumn said...

i just learned writing haiku thru the net. thanks for the nice comment.

my weekend was good, except that my little angel got sick. =[

what about you? ^^

Ivy said...

very dark, yet I feel many can relate to your poem. Stay inspired.

ashley said...

that is such a pretty {yet, sad} poem- you have a wonderful way with words.
and a tree house by the sea would be heaven!
x ashley

Beaut!fully Br()ken said...

Oh Wow !! I love this poem ! You've written so less, but your words speak so many things..it's lovely...also i love the pictures and your blog :)

Beaut!fully Br()ken said...

Hi! Aww...thank you so muc hfor your sweet comment...i lvoe your blog too !! Do come back for more...take care!